I met with Koo next to Landis Green. She said she'd like to spend the session working on learning how to organize her ideas in an essay. I came up with a simple prompt that Koo would need to answer by indicating a preference, and then supporting that preference with details. "Do you like the city of Tallahassee, yes or no, and why?"
The main reason that Koo decided she would state that she likes the city of Tallahassee is because of the natural surroundings. I helped her develop her essay by asking prompting questions. After a little verbal planning, she decided that Tom Brown Park was the main reason she loved Tallahassee. Her phrasing in describing why she liked Tom Brown was quite good, though we needed to work together to find different ways of creating sentences so as not to repeat the same endings and beginnings.
Koo elaborated on her thesis by talking about how the wide grasses relaxed her, the dog park made her happy, and the disco golf area was a place she could have fun. After we wrote about this, it was time to write a conclusion. This proved to be mildly difficult, as a strong conclusion is, essentially, a strong rephrasing, which Koo struggles with. I tried to frame the conclusion as a moment for Koo to remind the reader of her reasons and then leave the reader with a sentence they will remember after finishing the essay. The ending sentence ideas we talked about were suggestions to visit Tom Brown, general statements about how Tom Brown makes Tallahassee a good place, and how much Koo might miss Tom Brown. Framing the conclusion as a device for persuasion seemed to help her shape the organization of the paragraph overall.
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